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Wednesday, May 24, 2023

Excerpt tune whispered

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"Ranger lad at ride one fine day,

in dappled light of shadow wood,

by the ancient riverside,

met a lass fair and fine,

her yellow flower caught his eye,

and so by flowed their time.

When she awoke to bloody sight,

for Common cause the boy's life

flowed by the river bide,

dragon rider stood at her side,

there under sheltered boughs and in

yellow flowers time, the lass found

that she had lost her mind."


  1. Cool tale, and interesting wordplay. My only criticism is that I don't follow the rhyme scheme. If that's intentional, cool. It's also possible that there's a pattern and I just missed it. Otherwise, I think, if you're going to use rhyme, it should follow some kind of pattern.

    1. Thanks for posting. :)

      I'm not certain if you are suggesting a specific, historical rhyme scheme, such a iambic pentameter, or if you mean that it doesn't rhyme in your ear when it is spoken.

      I was going for a monorhyme scheme.

      Perhaps I should post my Threadcutter poem which uses two different schemes.

  2. I'm not sure what I was talking about, anymore.

    1. Perfectly understandable. Thanks for letting me know.